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The Dream of Tartness

Often after a trauma
there is the mundane revery
if I could only
mine was a dream of an unbearable tartness
in a drink of volcanic coldness
I sipped metallic hospital crushed ice water
tried not to vomit up the simplest of soups

normally there is the gift of not desiring
the smell of nausea clings to things
that can’t be kept down but

I conjured up something like limeade
as a nuclear bomb is something like a firecracker
while the tubes of lukewarm glucose, morphine
and hot piss kept me alive.

written in response to a dVerse prompt

  1. July 13, 2013 at 10:15 pm

    ewww…well i guess you can be glad you survived eh…mmm…envisioning the taste in the mouth now…

    i do like limeade though….much better than hot piss….blech

  2. July 14, 2013 at 1:47 am

    oh heck… the scents are overwhelming in this…ha…dang it..intense images.. hospital times are no fun and the pain is felt

  3. July 14, 2013 at 6:51 am

    A hospital so well depicted. A cold volcano.. so grueling, and the hot piss… yik.. well at least alive to feel this, and hopefully recovering.

  4. Laurie Kolp
    July 14, 2013 at 7:07 am

    So vivid!! Glad you’re okay.

  5. July 14, 2013 at 10:39 am

    Definitely another tact with the theme; I like the volcano image along with the limeade!

  6. July 14, 2013 at 8:20 pm

    Bang, def pushing the edges of comfortable, thank goodness it was only a dream !!

    • July 15, 2013 at 10:04 pm

      Well, actually… but I got better. Definitely something of the autobiographical in this one, I’m afraid…

  7. July 14, 2013 at 11:33 pm

    the nuclear bomb equivalent of limeaid… I wonder what on earth that could feel or taste like, but acidic to say the least. strong writing here. -mike

    • July 15, 2013 at 10:03 pm

      Thanks, Mike!

  8. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)
    July 16, 2013 at 3:39 am

    Almost too vividly described! I felt it with you.

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